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Somnus
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Let's post our own writes/poetry/verses, could be cool.
P.S: If someone wants an explanation of what I just wrote, just tell me, I'd love to ^^
I'll start:



Let me tell you the story of this tormented mind.
A flower with no garden, a violin without strings.
Hanging on to the memories we cannot forget.
Candlelight nights and claustrophobic days.
Barless prisons, the highs and lows.
The one looking for shelter when the rain stops.
Remembering things that never happen.
Can you imagine how that could be?

A fully awakened dream.
Paralyzed, a shadow, a scream.
The blood rush, the pressure on the chest.
''To wake up is to fall asleep.''
Like an ilussion, a smokescreen.
Nobody knows where I am or where I've been.
Like the bullet in a russian roulette.


My acid humor, Autumnus.
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I really like it. Has a good sense of continuity throughout, and the metaphorical examples convey the spirit of this pretty well. And "A flower without a garden" is tremendously sad.

Don't listen to the neg, people tend to be better at criticism than they are at any sort of quantifiable talent.
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Heathen wrote:I really like it. Has a good sense of continuity throughout, and the metaphorical examples convey the spirit of this pretty well. And "A flower without a garden" is tremendously sad.


As sad as a violin without strings. It resembles that any beauty can be alive or simply inanimate (aka music instrument). Which can make beauty with its sound, but without its beauty/sound is dead. Aka A flower without garden ^^

Edit: Nice to know that my poem was as bad as my other posts to you (not you @heathen) but whoever downvotes everything I post. XD
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I'll post a haiku :

One Median myth
elementsfury is god
Kill my feet peasants.
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You've attracted the attention of a real dickhead, Som. Good on ya for posting your poem.

Prime, as a student of Nipponese culture you should know there is more to haiku than syllable count.
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Edited by Somnus 1 year.
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Uncle , i also know that haikus were never meant to be used with latin alphabet since the alphabet makes words using separate letters and not through syllables like japanese. In short , you cant put literacy in both cultures because it just doesnt work that way. So you adapt.
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Just fucking with you prime

Though, strictly speaking haiku is an imagist genre.
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I wrote a "poem" last year for school. Would you like to see it? it's a bit long and there isn't much rhythm to it ( It's for a high school English I class, what else do you expect :) ).
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TheUnderling wrote:I wrote a "poem" last year for school. Would you like to see it? it's a bit long and there isn't much rhythm to it ( It's for a high school English I class, what else do you expect :) ).


I wonder why serious posts are asked if can be posted and shitposts are instagib :/

Ofc you can, that's why I made this post, to read what other's write ^^